Chapter One revision number 7

So I'm learning that nothing in writing is never finished. My genre is mainly screenwriting and its become the norm to need to revise a script for any number of reasons making it never really finished, no matter how much you pour your heart into it. I'm learning the same is true for fiction writing. As a matter of fact, I think fiction writing is much harder. For the screen you cant bog a script down with too much detail or no one will want to read it. In novels if your lacking in description no one will want to read it. For me being neurotic and my worst critic, no matter how good a chapter may be to someone else, i have to find a better way to do it. So i updated the Wattpad again, and updated the first few paragraphs on the blog under the tab The Haven to reflect the changes I've made. Granted no one reads this blog, and if they do, they certainly don't comment, but its OK. I will chalk it up to one day when the books ARE being read and people MIGHT be interested on the beginnings, they will have a detailed road map to my insanity and get to know me better on their own time. In the meantime though, its time to obsess about chapter 2 and 3.

The battle of Chapter One

I had posted this chapter on Wattpad but it bugged me to no end. Something just wasnt right with it, so I redid it. And I redid it AGAIN, and finally I polished it and posted it again. The rest of the book is OK, but this first chapter has plagued me for weeks. I hope its ok and if you want to read it check it out on Wattpad.